I like it that you absorb the reader into the story from the word go. You set the scene in a way that captivates the readers attention by blending into the narrative the minutei that is necessary to provide the basic bones of the the skeleton you will inevitably flesh out in future chapters. But it is done in a way that the reader has a basic picture of what the circumstances are, as well of tantalising hints of what has already been and, as yet, no idea of what is going to happen next. The outer walls of the jigsaw are nearly built but there is no determining at this point as to where the author will place the next piece. There is so much more yet to come and the use of banned music addiction as a central theme is so unique an idea, that the back story, and the future content will undoubtedly be as compelling as that which has so wheted the appetite already.
Thank you so much for your very kind feedback! I love your metaphor of a jigsaw---world-building is very much like that and I'm so pleased to hear that it's working well. It can be hard to judge whether you've found the right balance between enough detail to whet the appetite but not so much detail that the reader feels dumped down on by all the new information.
You are making it really hard for someone like me to be patient for the next instalment, it’s so gripping. I’m going to have to go for an evening stroll to distract myself until the next time!
I like it that you absorb the reader into the story from the word go. You set the scene in a way that captivates the readers attention by blending into the narrative the minutei that is necessary to provide the basic bones of the the skeleton you will inevitably flesh out in future chapters. But it is done in a way that the reader has a basic picture of what the circumstances are, as well of tantalising hints of what has already been and, as yet, no idea of what is going to happen next. The outer walls of the jigsaw are nearly built but there is no determining at this point as to where the author will place the next piece. There is so much more yet to come and the use of banned music addiction as a central theme is so unique an idea, that the back story, and the future content will undoubtedly be as compelling as that which has so wheted the appetite already.
More please, and soon!
Thank you so much for your very kind feedback! I love your metaphor of a jigsaw---world-building is very much like that and I'm so pleased to hear that it's working well. It can be hard to judge whether you've found the right balance between enough detail to whet the appetite but not so much detail that the reader feels dumped down on by all the new information.
Don't worry-- next chapter is coming soon!
You are making it really hard for someone like me to be patient for the next instalment, it’s so gripping. I’m going to have to go for an evening stroll to distract myself until the next time!
Brilliant writing!
Thank you so much! 😊 A writer always hopes to torment their reader a little 😂 (in a good way, of course!). Hope you enjoy your evening stroll.